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Money should be spent on creating new public buildings such as museums or town halls rather than renovating the existing ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is often a debated topic that the government should spend revenue on constructing new structures
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 as museums or town forums rather than restoring the existing monuments.
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 I agree that it is essential to protect constructions from the past, I
also
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 do not think spending on public buildings is a waste of
money
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. There are several reasons for spending a significant amount of budget on the restoration of historical buildings.
First
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 and foremost, they stand as a sentinel of time representing the worth of our ancestors.
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, pyramids of Eygpt are piles of mystery yet to be solved. Every time they explain something related to it, they are discovering unique attributes of our history. Every remain
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 them at present often represents our cultural heritage.
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, they can generate income as tourist sights as well as creating jobs. So many survey statistics have already proven it.
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, it does not mean that the construction of new buildings should be neglected.
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, it is not possible to protect all historical buildings, some of them are
unrepairable
not capable of being separated
inseparable
 and so should be demolished, so a better architecture can be built.
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, maintenance of new buildings is a lot easier when compared to their counterparts. On the long term, the government can solve a lot of
money
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 which can be used for the better good. To sum up, there are clear benefits of ensuring a large amount of investment into these old buildings as they will influence our present generation. That said, I do not believe spending
money
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 on new edifices is a waste of
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 as
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 provides essential benefits as well.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • symbolizes
  • evolving
  • aspirations
  • incorporate
  • accessibility
  • catalyst
  • economic development
  • heritage
  • conserves
  • cultural
  • integrity
  • operational inefficiencies
  • sustainably
  • repurpose
  • throwaway culture
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental degradation
  • context-specific
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