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People sleep less than before in many countries. Why do people sleep less? What affect does it have on individual and on society?

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In recent days, people are sleeping for a few hours when compared to the past.
Consequently
, sleeplessness is driving the individual into severe issues and
also
 health problems. In
this
 essay, I am going to discuss why the changes have occurred and what effects
this
 is having.
Firstly
, people who are residing near: Airports, City-centres, and traffic areas will struggle to sleep early. The sounds produced in those locations will disturb the residents nearby.
Secondly
, before going to bed, the majority of people spend their time watching movies and TV shows in the late night
also
 deprive them of sleep.
Finally
, persons who are having gruelling work stress in their daily life will suffer from balancing their rest.
For example
, even after office, people keep their nose to the grindstone at home in the night by sacrificing their sleeping time to complete their project within the deadline.
Accordingly
, sleeplessness will affect the health of a person by causing depression, migraine, and vomiting. The lack of sleep will affect one’s memory and
also
 productivity at work. One potentially dangerous problem is a shortage in sleeping hours will set the individual to feel drowsy while driving a vehicle. It will lead to accidents and injuries; where there is a scope of losing their life in a crash, and
also
 damages the public properties. In conclusion, sleep plays a pivotal role in everyone’s life. Sleeping for a short time is personally and professionally affecting an individual as well as society. In
this
 process, many have to face severe health disorders which caused by sleeplessness.
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