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Some people think watching movies is a waste of time. Do you agree or disagree?

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Entertainment aids in breaking the monotonous routine, and in
this
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, enjoying films top the chart.
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, a section of the masses
consider
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considers
 it a sheer useless business. I do not concur with
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 notion and hold the opposite view as
it
it is
it's
 not just a great stress buster but can
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 turn into a career for some. To embark on, watching movies is a way to relax and rejuvenate oneself. After a strenuous day at work,
one
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 wants to divert
one
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's mind, and there comes a relief in the form of films. Divergent genres,
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 as romance, action, thriller, suspense, and comedy serve an awesome
plater
a person who participates in or is skilled at some game
player
, which
one
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 looks forward to every week. Especially, weekends are the best time to engulf oneself with
latest releases
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the latest releases
. As per a survey by a leading magazine, around 80% of the populace relish movies and deem it as the only way to detach from the professional surroundings. Another profound reason to back my stance is that it is not just a mere way to uplift oneself from the same tedious
life but
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life, but
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 to turn a hobby into a professional pursuit.
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 gets inspired to venture into a world of name and fame. Though the life of an entertainer is an unpredictable
one
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, it reaps fruits if
one
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 is ready to take on the hardships
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. Shah
rukh
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Rukh
 Khan,
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, got inspired by watching Raj Kumar on the screen, and started desiring to become like
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; now here he is, the most admired
hero
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heroes
 not only in India but in the whole world as well. To encapsulate, watching films is not at all splurging of the precious time. Indeed, it works
wonder
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wonders
 for
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the
 mentally exhausted person as it relieves
one
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 from the myriad tension.
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, it is highly sought-after medium to turn a passion into
profession
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a profession
.
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