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Environmental problems are serious in many countries. It means that the only possible way to protect the environment is at an international level. To what extent, do you agree or disagree?

#countries #environment #level
The detrimental effects of environmental is quite grave not only at national level but to the whole
world
. Many awful problems persist in the global village. A lion’s share of society suggests, it is only possible at governmental level.
However
, I would disagree with
this
 statement. Country and country make the whole
world
. And the whole
world
 is facing global climatic change and environmental problems.
First
 of all, we cannot deny that the role of the bureaucrats and social international organizations are prime here as compared to
individual citizen
Suggestion
the individual citizen
individual citizens
. The program events they conduct at large scale required large sums of money in order to combat with
this
climatic
Suggestion
climate
 change
problems
Suggestion
problem
.
Secondly
, the foreign association and government bodies together can create a profound impact in maintaining the industrial area where pollutions are at extreme levels.
For instance
, a survey conducted by
world
 environment suggested that the pollutions in certain geographic regions already surpassed 80% which is very detrimental and should be stopped.
However
, individual concern in order to fight back with
this
 problem cannot be neglected. All individual know
this
 problem quite well. If an individual can switch off the light when not in use, we can imagine
this
 impact at
global level
Suggestion
the global level
a global level
.
In addition
, if people stopped using the plastic and other products which causes a lot of issues,
then
 the company would have to produce the products
such
 as eco-friendly. In a gist, governmental and international body would create profound impacts in combatting the
world
’s environment problems.
However
, individual concern cannot be neglected.
Submitted by Serhii Baraniuk on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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