Many people try to achieve success through their career or education. What can success mean to different people? What is your view of success?
It is a common thought that
success
can be achieved only by focusing on traditional studies and the employment system. However
, it can have a different meaning for some other people, such
as having a good family life
. I think success
is a satisfaction that can vary from person
to person
and depends on different situations.
To begin
with, a good proportion of society believes that success
is a result of hard work and consistent efforts in their student life
and later, in their professional career, while
others are being succeeded without a career. Though the first group is not in the wrong way, dependency on a single track to achieve goals can be detrimental to them. On the other hand
, there are some people who think that having a satisfactory life
with family is more important. For example
, a famous Bangladeshi writer named Naimul Islam has written in a book that if anyone's family isn't happy, he/she can't be a successful person
. Moreover
, if a person
with a good education has no family life
, he/she will face social problems in the near future.
According to
my opinion, success
is a feeling which depends on many things. Generally, different persons feel this
feeling in different kinds of situations. For instance
, a rich man can be unsuccessful, if he thinks that he is not complacent enough. However
, a poor man with utter satisfaction can consider himself a successful human. Therefore
, I think, success
should be treated as a feeling.
In conclusion, a lot of the public tries to gain success
by choosing a conventional career path but there are others who prefer their family life
to succeed. Meanwhile, I believe, success
is not any specific thing and its meaning changes with community, time and situations.Submitted by Jasim Uddin Rahat on
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