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In modern society, some people argue that schools become unnecessary as children can study at home via the Internet. Do you agree or disagree?

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The rapid progression of the Internet has paved the way for the growing popularity of distance learning. People are now speculating on the possibility of the Internet taking the place of a traditional
school
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. In my opinion, given the continued advance in technology, Internet-based learning can serve as an alternative to traditional class-based learning. Online
education
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 has a large number of advantages. It allows students to set their own study time. Unlike traditional learning, online courses offer children greater flexibility and enable them to create a timetable in line with their needs and characteristics. Students can
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 save tuition fees, because a virtual
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 normally charges students much less than a conventional
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 does. It is particularly a great option for those students with physical handicaps, who have great difficulties in commuting to
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school campus
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a school campus
the school campus
school campuses
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, for those who live far away from the
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, online
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 is remarkably favourable. It can be expected that the Internet is very likely to replace a physical
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 as an
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 provider in the near future if its drawbacks are removed. The
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 drawback of the virtual schools is lack of human contact, as opposed to a noted merit of traditional teacher-led
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, providing students with ongoing daily interactions with teachers.
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 weakness can be solved by taking advantage of bandwidth network technologies. The interaction between students can be guaranteed when one can contact with another—whenever and wherever he or she likes—via email, post comments on message boards and chat rooms, or even video conference for communication. Educators are
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 concerned that online learning cannot make all skills and knowledge transferable.
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, some courses require a high proportion of hands-on practice, which is beyond the capacity of online training.
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 problem can be
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 addressed by introducing multimedia as a teaching aid. By using audio and video, students can sample different learning styles and acquire both general and specialised knowledge of a subject. As suggested above, there are plenty of benefits of online learning, including
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flexible
, cost- saving and convenience.
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 it has two problems, lack of interaction and failing to provide a wide range of courses, both can be overcome as technology advances.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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