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you recently received a letter fron you bank that should have contained a new credit card. Unfortunately, the card was not in the letter. Write a letter to your bank manager. I your letter, Explain what has happened suggest the credit card should be cancelled for security reasons ask when a new credit card can be sent to you.

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Dear Manager, Trust
this
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letter
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 meets you well
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 I am writing to inform you that I have received the
letter
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with
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apply
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regarding the verification of my new credit
card
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. I truly appreciate the effort the bank put into getting it across to me, quite effective.
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, upon opening the
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, the
card
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 was not contained in the package and
this
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 is quite disheartening as I have waited for two months to get it. I fear that someone might have tampered with it before sending it out.
Due to
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 the inability to confirm the exact reason for
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, I strongly recommend that the
card
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is
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 cancelled to prevent any form of fraud on my account and that I get a new
card
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 sent to my location. I would appreciate
if
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 you
can
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 respond to
this
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letter
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 giving more clarity on the situation and
also
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 letting me know the new date when I can get a new
card
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 transferred to me for my use. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours Sincerely, Veronica.

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greeting and closing
Ensure that the greeting is formal and appropriate for the context of writing to a bank manager. Utilizing 'Dear Bank Manager' would be more suitable than 'Dear Manager' in this scenario.
task achievement
Maintain a formal tone throughout the letter. Phrases such as 'Trust this letter meets you well?' are informal and better suited for personal correspondence, not a letter to a bank manager.
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The explanation about the missing credit card could be more concise. Avoid unnecessary flattery or commentary about the bank's effort in order to maintain focus on the issue at hand.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph presents a distinct point. Separate the explanation, suggestion, and question into individual paragraphs to enhance readability and coherence.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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