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The range of technology available to people is increasing the gap between the rich and the poor. Others think it has an opposite effect. Discuss both views and give opinions.

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An argument that has been put forward is the notion that the effect of
technology
 developing lead to the narrow between the rich people and poor people bigger. While, others have the opposite opinion of
this
 view.
This
 essay will explore both sides of
this
 issue and present a personal view on the matter. Moving on to the negative aspect of
technology
 for different society layers in terms of income,
first
at
Suggestion
of
 all. Some of the
technology
 can help people to earn more money. Rich ones have more advantages to get to know the
technology
 than the other category of people.
Moreover
, some of the new
technology
are
Suggestion
is
 extremely expensive and
therefore
, rich folks could be able to pay the exorbitant prices to use them. Most of the
destitutes
poor enough to need help from others
destitute
 have no time and energy to pay attention to the new
technology
 as they have to work for long hours to make up for their living expenses.
This
 leads to increase in the gap at the different economic layer on the society.
On the contrary
, others take the view that the reduce the gap between the rich and poor people. Many new technologies make the world more convenient. People can be easy to get the information via
technology
.
For example
, internet. People can search for all information which is they needed.
Also
,
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 provided a space for people
have
Suggestion
having
 to contact each other easier than before. Different types of social position have the same right on the internet. It makes the gap between the rich and poor people smaller. In conclusion, I agree with the
later
referring to the second of two things or persons mentioned (or the last one or ones of several)
latter
 argument because a range of new
technology
 makes the world better and
convenient
Suggestion
more convenient
. All of
people
Suggestion
the people
 in the society, does not matter if they are rich or poverty stricken, can get benefits from it.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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