In many countries in the world,people buy clothes and choose hairstyles according to the latest fashion. Why is this happening ? is this a positive or negative development ?

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In the world today, people are becoming more fashion conscious and

this

is evident in their dressing and hairstyles. In my opinion

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people desire to look classy and fashionable in

order

to fit into the society and

this

has in turn led to so many illicit practices.

Firstly

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people

dress

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dresses

according to the fashion trend in

order

to appear rich and sophisticated. Some do

this

because of the nature of their jobs.

For instance

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celebrities

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actors

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actresses

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musicians and models) dress fashionably and

also

make the latest

haistyles

the arrangement of the hair (especially a woman's hair)

hairstyles

with the latest makeup on their faces in

order

to look appealing to their viewers.Most of them wear clothes or carry a particular hairstyle in

order

to name it after them.

For example

, in the 1990*s a

particular

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particularly

beautiful

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low cut hairstyle was named after a Romantic and Blues

(

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(

Rand B") musician called Toni Braxton.

On the other hand

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the religious society and most cultural groups condemn trendy fashion because of its negative impact

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especially on our youths and even marriages.A recent study has shown that many Nigerian universities enforced some draconian laws regarding indecent dressing in schools.

This

as a result

of girls wearing revealing clothes in

order

to be fashionable or attract the opposite sex

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thereby leading to rape. Boys prefer to wear singlets or T.

shirts

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Shirts

with a crazy hairstyle.

some

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Some

of them even colour their hair and

this

attracts cultists

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thereby luring them into armed robbery. Another point is that some married women feel jealous when they have friends whose husbands are rich and can afford sophisticated clothings and human hair weave-on for them.

This

makes them feel that their husbands are unable to provide for them and in most cases

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they commit

adultry

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adultery

order

to meet up with

such

class.

This

can lead to divorce or

seperation

the state of lacking unity

separation

. In conclusion

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dressing fashionably is not bad

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provided one dresses decently and makes

resposible

worthy of or requiring responsibility or trust; or held accountable

responsible

hairstyles that will not lead to illicit practices

such

as rape

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theft

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cultism and

adultry

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adultery

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