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Some people believe that the sure shot way to succeed in business is to have a unique product. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Write atleast 250 words.

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A successful
business
 is either built on a
product
 or on a service and the choice is always unique. Some believe that having a unique
product
 is the key to succeed. Whereas others claim that it depends on how well an individual can run and understand the
business
.
Although
 there have
been great
Suggestion
been a great business
business
 built on a
product
, I believe it all depends on the team building the
business
. Having a unique
product
 surely places great advantage to the
business
.
Firstly
, there is no competition.
For instance
, if I am the only person who sells Android phones, it is obvious that anyone who needs it will buy it from me, making
my
objective form of "I"
me
business
 rise.
Secondly
, a unique idea brings with it different ways of doing a particular thing. Like when Steve Jobs created the
first
 digital computer, it led to many other inventions like
ipads
(trademark) a pocket-sized device used to play music files
iPod
pads
, iPhones, iTunes etc.
However
, merely having a unique
product
 does not make a
business
 successful.
For instance
- if two companies are selling the same
product
, the ones with better quality or service will be preferred
more for obvious reasons
Suggestion
for more obvious reasons
. Even more, two companies selling the same
product
 can have different
business
 models and that makes the difference. Overall, I believe an uncommon
product
 does
gives
Suggestion
give
 some added
advantage but
Accept comma addition
advantage, but
 in the end, it all boils down to the way a
business
 is being done. The better the methodology, more successful the
business
 will be.
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