A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Although
it is sometimes thought that animals ought to stay unexploited by humans, others believe that they should be used for numerous human purposes. In my opinion, I consider that animals’ safety is important and
that is
why people should not exploit them. On the one hand, some people think that
well-being
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the well-being
of a human is paramount,
thus
life
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the life
and
needs
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the needs
of a mankind should be prioritized over the animals’ rights.
In other words
, humanity
tend
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tends
to use animals in various ways to satisfy basic needs which,
consequently
, may lead to extinction of animals. To illustrate, some people serve them as food to overcome hunger, some
corporations even
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corporations, even
use them as testing samples to observe reaction which some component may occur.
Furthermore
, being driven to exploit animals may be vital in order to survive in cold climatic zones where temperature degrees go as low as -50 Celsius. People are not able to exist in
such
temperatures without
help
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the help
of an animal, they frequently use animals’ fur and fat to get warmer.
On the other hand
, some people think that
rights
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the rights
of animals should be taken into account, because
otherwise
number of endangered species will rise dramatically and I agree. The planet Earth is settled by billions of species
such
as humans, animals and plants. In that matter, moderate functioning is possible only when each of them is in balance. By that I emphasize importance, which animals bring into our life.
For example
, if snakes had not existed, other species would have not destroyed,
as a result
flora and fauna will be in danger.
In addition
, more and more people prefer to keep an animal
such
as
cat
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a cat
or dog for living a versatile life full of adventures. In conclusion, while people may vary in their opinions, I think that
animals’ rights
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the animals’ rights
and safety should be saved because their contribution for a well-being of a person is difficult to overestimate.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Exploitation
  • Animal welfare
  • Ethical treatment
  • Vegetarianism
  • Veganism
  • Cognitive dissonance
  • Humane
  • Live stock
  • Cruelty-free
  • Bioethics
  • Conservation
  • Habitat preservation
  • Ecosystem
  • Biodiversity
  • Animal testing
  • Synthetic biology
  • Genetic engineering
  • Speciesism
  • Animal husbandry
  • Sustainable farming
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