Some people think that government is wasting money on the arts and that this money should be spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree/disagree?

It is undoubtedly true that most of the
government
's budget
are
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is
on
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about
arts.Some people are of the opinion that spending so much money on entertainment is a waste of resources.While
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
agree that most of the resources should be channelled to the public services, I would
also
argue that the arts should not be completely left out It is of utmost importance that the
government
should spend most of their resources on public services
such
as roads
,
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,
schools and hospitals because they determine the quality of life.
For
instance in
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instance, in
the 2018 Nigerian budget the
government
reduced the public spending on the health sector and
this
consequently
led to an increase in death rate because the individuals could not access quality medical service.
Thus
,
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,
this
shows that a large proportion of the public funds should go to the public
sectors so
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sectors, so
that the society can have access to a better life.
However
,
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,
the arts and entertainment sector should not be neglected.
Firstly
without the assistance from the
government
places
such
as theatres, art galleries may be forced to shut down because most individuals might not be able to afford the cost of
going
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going to such places
such
places.
Also
the entertainment industry in its own way improves the quality of life as individuals can derive pleasure by going to music concerts and theatres. In conclusion
,
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,
although
most of the
government
's budget should be channelled towards the public service, spending money on
arts
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the arts
should not be seen as a waste rather it should continue.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enriching society
  • promoting cultural understanding
  • development of talent
  • creative industries
  • economic benefits
  • generate revenue
  • cultural heritage
  • identity
  • prioritize spending
  • needs of the majority
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