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A museum near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntary/unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntary/unpaid work at the museum. Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntary/unpaid work. In your letter • Explain why you want to do voluntary/unpaid work at the musuem • Describe some skill and qualities you have the would be useful • Give details of when you would be available for work

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Dear Sir/ Madam, I hope you are doing well. I am writing
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 letter
for
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the application of part-time voluntary work
in
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 the Quila Mubarak Museum, Patiala,
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This
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 is near
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my home. I have been looking for
such
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 unpaid community work since
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 month, as I am a student in a
soci
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social
 worker Diploma Course, which would be very good for me to get hands-on experience in that. I
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 did my bachelor's in history and art, so I have good experience in
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 field.
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 to
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, I have good communication and organizational skills, which
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 me to communicate with tourists and visitors, and organisational skills can lead me to organize events and exhibitions. I have a keen interest in learning history and art, and that would be very useful for me to do
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 work by heart. As I am a student, I can do
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 job every day after my college hours after 3.00pm, and my weekends are fully free, so I can do
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 Job as per
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your schedule. Hoping for a prompt reply on
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 application. Yours Sincerely, Jashan.

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tone and structure
Consider restructuring the letter for a more formal tone, such as addressing the director as 'Dear Director' and using more professional language.
grammar
Make sure to check for minor grammatical errors, such as punctuation and spacing issues (e.g., consider placing a space after commas).
clarity
To enhance clarity, you might want to separate your skills into bullet points for easy reading.
motivation
Your motivation for applying is clear and relevant to your studies, which adds weight to your application.
greeting and closing
You appropriately signed off the letter with 'Yours Sincerely', maintaining a respectful tone.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • voluntary work
  • unpaid work
  • museum
  • community service
  • exhibits
  • art and culture
  • communication skills
  • organizational skills
  • commitment
  • availability
  • part-time
  • experience
  • passion
  • community involvement
  • engagement
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