The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is argued by some people that the general
health
of the populace in the
future
is expected to worsen compare to the status now. I agree with
this
notion because the
increase
in the
use
of telecommunication devices in the
future
will promote sedentary lifestyles, while there will be more
health
complications from the technological bio-products.
Firstly
, the
use
of telecommunication devices discourages an active
lifestyles
Suggestion
lifestyle
and it is expected to
increase
in the
future
. In
order
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
words, people may no longer walk outside their homes to interact with their
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
and
friends but
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friends, but
rather communicate
electronically which
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electronically, which
will result in a rise in obesity and other associated
health
complications
such
as diabetes and coronary heart disease.
For example
, a recent study by the Nigeria Medical Association identified sedentary lifestyles as a major cause of type 2 diabetes and cardiovascular diseases.
Thus
, with the projected rise in the
use
of these devices and the internet for communication, more people may suffer deleterious
health
problems.
Furthermore
, the rise in the bio-products of technology will
increase
some
health
problems
such
as
Leukamia
malignant neoplasm of blood-forming tissues; characterized by abnormal proliferation of leukocytes; one of the four major types of cancer
leukaemia
leukaemias
and skin cancers.
This
occur
Suggestion
occurs
has occurred
due to harmful radiations emitted during the production and
use
of various electronics and equipment like Human Scanning machines in airports and mobile phones.
For instance
, medical experts encouraged a limited
use
of devices with
infra-red
having or employing wavelengths longer than light but shorter than radio waves; lying outside the visible spectrum at its red end
infrared
radiation due to its harmful effects.
Therefore
, with the expected
raise
a growth in strength or number or importance
rise
in technology in the
future
, more people
will be expose
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will be exposed
to technological by-products that can harm their
health
. In conclusion, the standard of
health
of people in the
future
is likely to decrease due to the sedentary lifestyles from the projected
increase
in the
use
of telecommunication devices and from the by-products of technology which will
increase
and affect more people.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Standard of health
  • 2. Average
  • 3. Lower
  • 4. Future
  • 5. Aging population
  • 6. Chronic diseases
  • 7. Sedentary lifestyle
  • 8. Lack of exercise
  • 9. Poor dietary habits
  • 10. Environmental pollution
  • 11. Technological advancements
  • 12. Impact on health
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