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Many people believe that having a fixed punishment for all crimes is more efficient. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having a fixed punishment?

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It is sometimes thought that all crimes can be effectively deterred by having a fixed
punishment
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. A fixed
punishment
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 can prevent people from committing all violent crimes and save more time in court, but there are
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 drawbacks to be taken into consideration.
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,
one
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 evident benefit of having a fixed
punishment
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 is that it is a more effective deterrent when people know the exact consequences for the
crime
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 they commit. To put it another way, if a
person
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 knows for sure that he will incarcerate for long sentences in prison because he offended or harassed
one
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 of the public; he will think twice before committing an
offense
a lack of politeness; a failure to show regard for others; wounding the feelings or others
offence
 toward people.
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, having a fixed sanction would be advantageous because it means that being able to afford a good
defense
(military) military action or resources protecting a country against potential enemies
defence
 attorney will not affect the
punishment
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 given, which leads to greater equality among delinquents.
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, if there is no fixed penalty for each
crime
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, an offender who killed
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someone would
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someone, would
 need a smart
defense
(military) military action or resources protecting a country against potential enemies
defence
 attorney to shun death penalty.
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 will result in spending a lot of money and waste more time on
trails
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the trails
.
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, to prevent any corruption within the legal system affecting the
punishment
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 given, the fixed
punishment
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 is considered the best solution to face
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 problem.
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 will prevent criminals from slipping through loopholes in the law as the fixed
punishment
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 option will make sure to keep them off the streets, and society will be effectively protected as an indirect result.
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,
one
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 possible problem is that not all crimes are committed under the same circumstances.
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, a
person
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 who plans a violent
crime
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 should not receive the same
punishment
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 as
someone
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 who acts in self-
defense
(military) military action or resources protecting a country against potential enemies
defence
. To illustrate, an individual who plans to kill
someone
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 should be pleaded guilty and applied the death penalty to him. But, if a
person
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 killed
someone
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 mistakenly because he acts in self-
defense
(military) military action or resources protecting a country against potential enemies
defence
 should not be punished because he was protecting his life. Another negative aspect is that personal circumstances,
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 as extreme poverty or mental health problems, ought to be taken into account.
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, a woman in Egypt was suffering from extreme mental health issues, and
one
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 day, she set the fire
on
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in
 her
neighbor’s
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 home.
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 of her illness, the judge did not imprison her as she was not conscious when she did her
crime
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.
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, a
person
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 who has never committed a
crime
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 should not receive the same
punishment
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 as a repeat offender with a long record in prison. In conclusion, while having a fixed
punishment
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 can benefit both individuals and society, it can
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 lead to bias sanctions and unfair trials among criminals.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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