In many countries, as people are earning more these days, they are also spending money in buying more and more items. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Since employees are highly paid
,
Accept space
,
they can afford
luxurious lifestyle including
Suggestion
the luxurious lifestyle, including
the luxurious lifestyle including
a luxurious lifestyle including
expensive clothes
,
Accept space
,
gadgets and home appliances.Many people
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
believed
that it is a negative trend and I completely agree with the
view point
a mental position from which things are viewed
viewpoint
because it leads an use and throw culture which eventually result in
serious threat
Suggestion
serious threats
a serious threat
to our natural environment.
Firstly
Linking Words
, high income
make
Suggestion
will make
makes
today's generation to buy anything they want so they buy products without thinking whether it is useful or not.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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