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Some say that rich countries should help poor countries with food and education. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your experience.

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Helping in the
world
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 is among the one of the most important qualities. Poverty stricken nations should be assisting with the essential needs of wealthy nations, I believe that it's important to the nations to help because the nations can increase their relations.
Food
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 is the most crucial part of the human beings. So the developed countries should provide the support to the underdeveloped countries with
food
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. For examples, the country like Africa, where there is the scarcity of
food
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 can get help from the countries like India, The USA, and many more which lead them to use the African resources. There are many countries nowadays trying to help there neighbouring countries to get rid of the main problems
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food
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. Various countries have signed the contract to eradicate the main cause of scarcity of
food
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 due to which peoples are dying.
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, with
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 one country can support another country to overcome the problems related to
food
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. In today's era, education is the valuable source of individuals, without education person has to suffer a lot. About more than half of the
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 population are illiterate. As the
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 is advancing toward the technologies, there is a lack of the intelligent people available. For that the states who are richer should provide education to the state where literacy rate is minimized. For examples, a lot of countries have come up with ideas to deal up with the situation. Countries like Germany, Ireland, Australia, has open the gate of their University so that people can get educated with minimum investment. In my opinion, it's important for the countries help each other to gain and cope up with the modern growing
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.
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