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International marketing is sometimes seen as invasive and an intrusion into the country in question. Others argue that it is a necessary and economical form of education in addition to spreading ideas, language and culture. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Many people today do not agree with the idea of international marketing because they see it as a threat to their countries. Others argue, that it is important for the society especially in terms of learning culture, language and economy. In my opinion,
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 trend is, and has been very beneficial to the humanity. Those who oppose
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 development agree that it has been affecting them negatively, specifically in terms of finances.
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 is because as international products come to across a country, local vendors make lesser profits. An example would be the farmers in the Philippines, who grow agricultural goods to make a living. But because of the emerging fruits and vegetables from other countries, the sales from their own countries decreased.
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 affects the growth and production of the local goods,
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 leading the native people to bankruptcy.
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, in my belief, international marketing has brought a couple of positive developments in society. One of which is the wide-spread learning about different cultures.
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, the exportation of food from Asia to the Western countries paved a way for these people to learn Japanese or Chinese cooking which are very popular now everywhere in the world.
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 are becoming more aware how to use other languages, especially the standard one which is the English language. With these advantages, individuals become more highly educated; helping them to become globally competitive and successful. In conclusion,
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 others say that international marketing has become an interruption to their countries financially, I would argue that it has brought advantages to the people, especially in terms of education and culture-learning process. Governments should still be cautious in applying
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 a way that they protect their country’s welfare while involving the prosperity around the globe.
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