some people think that the development of technology help to decrease crime and other people think that would encourage crime to discuss both views and give your opinion

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In recent years technology advancement at
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
peak. There are views about how these advancement useful to
deteriote
become worse or disintegrate
deteriorate
the rate of criminal activities. While some have
view
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viewed
that
this
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will actually boost those illegal
activity
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activities
. In my
pospesctive
a way of regarding situations or topics etc.
perspective
,
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,
this
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development
definitely reduce
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definitely reduces
has definitely reduced
crime rate
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crime rates
the crime rate
.
Tobegin
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To begin
with
,
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,
there are
numeroues
amounting to a large indefinite number
numerous
crimes which are now negligible because of the
tehcnoligy
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technology
. Start with
biggest innovation
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the biggest innovation
of tech which is camera record everything over streets and shops and prevent as well being helpful in finding robbers and murders. In
addtion
a component that is added to something to improve it
addition
to that we can easily track a
cyber crime
crime committed using a computer and the internet to steal a person's identity or sell contraband or stalk victims or disrupt operations with malevolent programs
cybercrime
with the help of cyber security cell and computer experts
this
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wouldn't possible without technology. Mobile phones are
playingg
the act of playing a musical instrument
playing
vital role too by alerting
,
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,
provinding
give something useful or necessary to
providing
safety news and
connectting
connect, fasten, or put together two or more pieces
connecting
contacting
their loved ones.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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