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You have an extended family and every year you all get together to go on a family trip for a week. Your uncle is in charge of the plans this year and you would like to suggest a place you have visited lately. Write a letter to your uncle. In your letter: suggest the place you recommend describe your experience in this place mention what you could do there

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Dear Uncle, I hope you are doing good and as always you are in charge of planning the event
this
 year. Recently, I have been to a
place
 in the California state very near to the Silicon Valley called the Yosemite National Park. I would recommend you to suggest
this
place
 because it will satisfy all our family needs and activities. The
place
 is covered with
lots
 of trees and wildlife. During my visit with
friends
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 we had been
into
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hiking with a group of people, filled with
lots
 of fun and
exciting
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 to see the beauty of
the
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nature. Apart from that, we
also
 had a tour guide who took us to various places where we could photograph endangered animals and different plant species. It has
lots
 of fun activities during
summer
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 season, but we had
an
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 option of skiing in the snow during our visit. Make sure you visit
this
place
 during the summer, as you will have
lots
 of other activities available
such
 as hiking mountains, water sports, and camping. It will be a great
place
, loaded with
lots
 of fun with other family members. Yours Lovingly, Surya
Submitted by SuryaTeja Duggi on

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