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The free movement of goods across national borders has long been a controversial issue. Some people argue that it is necessary for economic growth, while others claim that it damages local industries.

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Goods
 play an important role in our economy. They are defined as tangible commodities. Trading of these commodities has taken place locally and beyond borders throughout the centuries. The free movement of
goods
 has always been a controversial issue but the dispersion of these products has spurred economic growth locally and globally. There are several reasons that align with the economic growth
due to
 the free movement of
goods
. First of all,
resources
 are dispersed around the world in a random manner. They are found in territories which are ruled by different laws. The trading of these
resources
 is important to gain an
overall
 balance in a globalized economy. There is
scarcity
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 certain items in the local market. Modern technological growth in communication, transaction and transportation could help to solve
this
 efficiently. Importing certain
goods
 for cheaper prices will
also
 improve the
overall
 sales and taxes collected. The global trading will collectively address the issues of
scarcity
, innovation and productivity.
However
, certain local
resources
 are limited. An increase in demand for certain products will lead to the exploitation of these
resources
. Certain
goods
 have significant importance to the locals rather than people who reside in other territories. The imbalance will lead to conflicts with the locals as governments might prioritize sales over beliefs. Importing competing products with lower prices to address
scarcity
 might destabilize the local market. The quality of items might not be up to the standards. In conclusion, globalized trade is a great way to solve problems.
However
, prioritizing issues is necessary to minimize conflicts, reduce exploitation and improve quality. Primarily the local industries must be stabilized and trading should be taking place depending on the
scarcity
.
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The essay presents a balanced view on the topic, considering both pros and cons of free movement of goods.
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Logical structure and clear paragraphing have been effectively used to organise ideas.

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