Governments and big companies should work together to reverse the affect of environmental damages rather than making individuals responsible for that. To what extent you support the statements?

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We live in an unspoken assumption that we can still survive on earth,
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the recent incident of paradise fire have shown that nature is surpassing our capacity to be prepared for the magnitude of disaster that the disordered earth can cause. We are unsure to what extent we can reverse the environmental damages, moving forward with the common goal is the way forward. While some argue that it's only the responsibility of the
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and big companies to revamp what is damaged, some say that the onus lies with individuals. I do not completely support both the statement and I will present relevant examples to support my answer. "Be the change you want to see in the world" a quote by Gandhi fits just right in. Citizens often believe that cleaning the environment is the responsibility of the
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only without realising that we are a part of the same society and are equally responsible. Individuals being ignorant about the fact that a small change in the habit can cause a big
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.
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, we all love to enjoy food and juices sitting on the beach often leaving the garbage at the shore. These garbage reaches the sea and are consumed by sea creatures
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mistakenly
mistaken
as food leading to unnatural death.
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is one of the examples where we are unintentionally harming the nature, there are multiple acts that we do in our daily lives that are causing harm. To contribute to reduce the
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of environmental damages, we could take small steps
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a) Car or Bike Pool, people travelling to the same route can travel together b) Utilising public transport rather than travelling
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with
personal vehicles These two small yet effective steps could help in reduction in carbon emission and may result in controlling
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levels
of air pollution low.
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plays an important role in setting control mechanism to balance environmental health.
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, the only controlling mechanism is not enough, we need monitoring and feedback
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as well as mechanisms to
complete the cycle.
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, the
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has put a permissible limit to carbon emissions by the branded vehicles. The Tesla incident shook the
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officials when they found out the amount of damage that these vehicles have done to the nature.
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could have been avoided by regular audits at the manufacturer's. Few of the areas where I feel
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the government
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corporations
corporate
can work together
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a) Big Corporates put little more efforts to CSR activities and truly abiding by the rule and regulations set by the
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. Present the supporting documents at the time of audits by
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officials b) Signing-off the new inventions of Big Companies by approvals from scientists and environmentalists to foresee any future affects In conclusion, I would like to highlight that its not only the responsibility of
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and big companies, we as a citizen are equally responsible
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for
the cause and
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. We share the same society and small changes to our habits will have greater
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in
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the future
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can lay
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rules, however
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, we as a citizen needs to play our role for a better and cleaner future.
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