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In some countries, young people at the age of 18 are considered adults and can drive a car, vote and get married, while other countries don't allow it. What age do you think is the best to be considered an adult?

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Currently in some societies, at 18years of
age
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, a young individual is regarded as an adult,
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 allowing the young person the right to cast
vote
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votes
 and license to drive or enter into the institution of marriage. In my opinion, I believe 18 years to be a very appropriate consideration for adulthood because at that stage there is better
development
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developed
 physically and from
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the experiences
 gained, and
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 independence.
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, at 18, the human body and the
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brain which
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brain, which
 is the power house of the human body system are fully developed for
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 a person to carry on responsibilities as choosing a good
life
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 partner, selection of leaders and driving on public roads
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 means that at that stage of
life
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, the
brain
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 of the young individual has better cognitive ability, having
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 gathered several
life
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 experiences and built effective relational skills that enables him function properly as a complete, fully developed adult. As an illustration, a study done by world renowned
brain
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 surgeon, Dr Ben Carson revealed that the
brain
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 function of an 18year old individual when compared to that of a younger human is able to better process information, retain memories/data and think effectively. Another important reason, why 18 year olds should be considered adult is that at that point in
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, the young individuals having concluded senior high school in most cases,
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 finds himself in an entirely independent environment either as a university student or working a paid job. What's more, these young ones find themselves living outside the watch of their parents, in far away towns as students, leaving them the sole responsibility of personal and school decision making, while those who get employed are
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 left to make
decision
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a decision
decisions
the decision
 concerning their jobs and
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 contribute positively to the workforce and
output
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the output
 of the society which they belong to. In conclusion,
age
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 certainly is a determinant of adulthood stage of
life
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 and I strongly feel that there is not a more appropriate
age
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 to be regarded as adults and partake in all the benefit/duties that come with adulthood, as the
age
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 18 since the individual is fully formed and already independent.
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