In some countries, young people at the age of 18 are considered adults and can drive a car, vote and get married, while other countries don't allow it. What age do you think is the best to be considered an adult?

Currently in some societies, at 18years of
age
, a young individual is regarded as an adult,
consequently
allowing the young person the right to cast
vote
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votes
and license to drive or enter into the institution of marriage. In my opinion, I believe 18 years to be a very appropriate consideration for adulthood because at that stage there is better
development
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developed
physically and from
experiences
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the experiences
gained, and
also
independence.
Firstly
, at 18, the human body and the
brain which
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brain, which
is the power house of the human body system are fully developed for
such
a person to carry on responsibilities as choosing a good
life
partner, selection of leaders and driving on public roads
This
means that at that stage of
life
, the
brain
of the young individual has better cognitive ability, having
also
gathered several
life
experiences and built effective relational skills that enables him function properly as a complete, fully developed adult. As an illustration, a study done by world renowned
brain
surgeon, Dr Ben Carson revealed that the
brain
function of an 18year old individual when compared to that of a younger human is able to better process information, retain memories/data and think effectively. Another important reason, why 18 year olds should be considered adult is that at that point in
life
, the young individuals having concluded senior high school in most cases,
subsequently
finds himself in an entirely independent environment either as a university student or working a paid job. What's more, these young ones find themselves living outside the watch of their parents, in far away towns as students, leaving them the sole responsibility of personal and school decision making, while those who get employed are
also
left to make
decision
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a decision
decisions
the decision
concerning their jobs and
also
contribute positively to the workforce and
output
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the output
of the society which they belong to. In conclusion,
age
certainly is a determinant of adulthood stage of
life
and I strongly feel that there is not a more appropriate
age
to be regarded as adults and partake in all the benefit/duties that come with adulthood, as the
age
18 since the individual is fully formed and already independent.
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