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Many country encourage tourism. Does it bring advantages or disadvantages?

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In recent decades, low cost airfare has made international travel easier and many countries have,
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, developed their
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 industries
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 key sectors of their economies. While it is clear
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 brings obvious benefits to the countries that host tourists, it is
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 true to say it may bring disadvantages as well. Undoubtedly, there are significant benefits that
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 brings to a
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.
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, a thriving tourist industry implies an increasing need for a variety of services
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 as hotels, transport, restaurants, and entertainment.
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 results in a considerable number of jobs being created for people who lack a college education and
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 the development of the infrastructure needed to accommodate visitors.
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,
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 is a "green" industry that, unlike factories, generates a low level of pollution. In fact, because beautiful natural landscapes are often places that tourists come to see, a
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 will
often be
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often, be
 sure to maintain the landscape in order to keep it attractive for tourists. Despite the benefits, there are aspects of
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 that may prove harmful to a
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.
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, a
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 may suffer from the loss of their traditional culture.
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 is caused by people in a
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 changing their lifestyle, customs, and language in order to more effectively serve visitors or because they become influenced by foreign countries.
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 can cause stress in a traditional society and could even lead to animosity towards tourists.
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, because tourists often carry expensive objects like cameras and are unaware of their surroundings, they make good targets for theft. Crime
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 increases
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 of the increases in drugs and prostitution that caters to some
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. In summary, global
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 is greatly beneficial to an economy and environment of a
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.
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, it can be detrimental in several ways. To my way of thinking, a
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 should seek to develop its
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 industry because it can bring steady jobs to many people without their need for higher education and without the risk of environmental damages.

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