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Some people prefer to buy food in a supermarket, others prefer to do their food shopping online. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Technology has greatly improved lifestyles in our world today, especially in the agricultural sector.
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 can be seen from the way we manufacture foods down to the method of distribution to consumers. Certain people would choose to purchase meals in a supermarket rather than shop for
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 online; while others will like to settle for the latter. The idea of purchasing meals in supermarkets is mostly accompanied with the believe that
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 is not stale. These are people who are particular about freshly made foods. Leftover or refrigerated foods are usually not an option for
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 individuals.
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 to
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, is the issue of cleanness. The environment where the
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 is being made beginning from the maker of the meal to the kitchen utensils used is
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 an important factor to be scrutinized
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 can not be over emphasized. An example of
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 individuals are those in the medical field.
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, others prefer to purchase their
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 online because it is easy, saves energy and encourages time management.
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 method comes with an option of delivering the meal directly to the consumer's doorstep. Report has it that in the past three years, 82% of the United States citizens prefer to buy their
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 mostly online. In conclusion, I am of the opinion that it is most preferable to buy meals in the supermarket than online because one needs to be aware of the state of the
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 to be bought for health purposes.
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, it is pertinent to survey the environment where the dish was prepared.
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