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Nowadays parents are sending their children to trips abroad for educational purpose. What are the advantages and disadvantages of it?

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Movement of people from one place to another have been on the high side. These could be for business purposes, education or vacation. Presently, wards are now being sent to study outside their home countries by their parents because of certain reasons. One, High level of creativity. Some countries seem to have better and more advanced technology than the others. These are nation's where most of the teaching is done using a computer and students are being taught how to use these new innovations to be creative. An example of
such
 is the recent 3D kidney invention
that is
 being made to match different individual organs,
therefore
 eliminating the issue of finding a match for certain kidney patients. Again, is an information exchange advantage. The students are open to different ideas from people living in different places with different cultural backgrounds.
In other words
, international students tend to be well informed more than local students. Despite these advantages, there are challenges that could come with
this
 kind of child investment. One of which is the issue of returning back. A lot of international students find it hard to return back to their country because of certain factors like friends and better job opportunities. The urge to remain within their circle of friends as against their family is usually high. These students prefer to sieve all ties with the home country.
In addition
, is the issue of language. The tendency of picking up the language of the country of study is high and the likely hood of giving up once identity can not be over emphasized.
This
 does not encourage preservation of once culture. Children sent to other countries are usually not under the care of anyone and as
such
, they find it easy to pick up other people's identity especially when they are being made fun of by friends.
Finally
, the idea of sending a child abroad for educational purposes will put the child a step ahead of those allowed to study locally,
moreover
, it is very crucial that they are
also
 under the care of a guardian who is readily available to guide them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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