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Everyone should become vegetarian because they do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet. Do you agree or disagree?

#meat #diet
Some people believe that it is unnecessary to eat
meat
 to stay healthy. I totally agree with the idea of becoming vegetarian. On the one hand, a portion without
meat
 is
also
 beneficial
for
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to
 people’s health.
Firstly
, the nutrition in vegetarian food not only provides adequate necessary energy, but
also
 offers a variety of vitamins for people’s healthy development.
For example
, while tofu contains a lot of
protein which
Accept comma addition
protein, which
 will be transferred into sustenance after digestion, the vitamin C in oranges helps people to strengthen the disease resistance.
Secondly
, vegetables and fruits are obviously less fat than
meat
,
this
 will help people to stay fit and get rid of obesity.
Therefore
, almost vegetarians might not be infected with the illnesses which relates overweight. On the
second
 hand, people should become vegetarian because of several reasons. Every day, the livestock industry is releasing a large amount of waste, almost odd animal’s organs
such
 as heads, bones, or skins will be dumped into the landfills after being killed to get
meat
. Becoming vegetarian is a way of reducing the waste
meat
,
thus
, we could protect our clean environment which is very important for the human well-being.
Furthermore
, I believe that every species has the rights to live in
natural way
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a natural way
. The livestock industry somehow leads to the fact of animal abuse which always makes people shock and has the sense of
guilty
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guilt
.
For instance
, the
gooses
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geese
 have been suffered from overeating to be fat enough, in order to provide good quality organs for human’s food. For that reason, animal’s
meat
 should not be a part of our portion. In conclusion, I believe that following the trend of being vegetarian is necessary because of its beneficial reasons
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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