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Small local shops are losing the race to get more footfalls in their store as compared to the malls.

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, there is an increase in their closure rate as compared to the other which,

on the contrary

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, is rapidly increasing its number. I believe that local communities will ultimately benefit from

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, independent stores are fragmented, in terms of location. Due to which not everything is available in

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store.

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, a store generally selling groceries will not have electronics in their inventory, due to

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, a customer might have to travel to different places to get everything he needs. Small stores can provide extra discounts to make some sales, but it would be hard to pull the crowd away from the mall.

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, a mall provides a better ambiance and shopping experience compared to the former, since it has more floor space and can accommodate more shops providing different products under

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roof.

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, fuel consumption would be less since the clients would find everything under

one

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roof.

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, a customer can browse through many designer labels under

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roof. Due to all these reasons malls not only have an advantage over the local brick and mortar

shops but

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shops, but

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helps in reducing unnecessary wastage of fuel. To conclude, small shops can create opportunities for serious buyers, but in the long run, the younger demographic of a country would prefer to go to a mall due to convenience and due to the multitude of options it provides. I would like to see more malls than the small stores due to the reduction in fuel wastage.

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

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Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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Life was better when technology was simpler. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Writing Task 1: The percentage of men and women aged 60-64 who were employed in four countries in 1970 and 2000

Many people believe that mobile phones cause more harms than the benefits and that’s why mobile phones should be restricted? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that children’s time outside of school should be filled with scheduled activities such as art and music classes and sports. Others feel that children need free time to play and relax. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Many children no longer read books and instead spend their time using modern technology. While some people think this is a positive trend, others think it is a problem. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.