Obesity is increasing in many developing countries affecting the children. What are some possible reasons for this and suggest possible solutions

Westernization is bringing the culture of fast food in many developing countries, even though it is useful in modern lifestyle, most of the fast foods contain bad cholesterol, too much sugar,
such
as; fried chicken, fried potato, high-sugar
candy
and cake.
However
, a solution for
this
must be an innovation in cooking technology to provide a safer product,
for instance
; there are several kinds of new fast foods available; non-sugar
candy
, skimmed
milk
, fat-free food. Frying foods with oil is becoming a very popular cooking technique,
although
it is making the tasty ingredients with fat, it is causing many dangerous effects on people's health,
such
as these diseases; stroke, obesity, fatty liver.
In addition
, a possible solution to
this
could be a new invention that can make dishes less harmful to human,
for example
; Xylitol can be used as an ingredient to replace sugar in making
candy
,
furthermore
, there is a technology that allowed business to separated fat from
milk
and creating a new kind of
milk
that it contains little or no bad cholesterol.
However
, technology may not helpful if the new healthy product doesn't taste good to the customers, so the business will need to spend more efforts on innovation to have created the more attractive products,
this
can be a sugar-free strawberry
candy
, low-fat
milk
with extra calcium and fat-free chicken fried with oil-less frying machine. In summary, fast foods are relevant with modern lifestyle of many societies even though it has several side effects, the solutions above may help reduce the bad side of fast foods and made it become more popular.
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