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Convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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One of the most significant advances in civilization is the development of modern methods of
food
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 production and preparation.
Convenience
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 foods have now become the norm in many societies.
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 some people idealise traditional cooking practices and believe they will prevail indefinitely, demographic trends suggest that
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 is unlikely to be the case. In fact, there a number of reasons for believing that
convenience
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 foods are likely to grow in popularity. The
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 reason is the decline in family size and the increase in single-adult households. In more traditional societies, where families tended to be large, it made economic sense for one person to devote him or herself to time-consuming domestic tasks
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 as growing and preparing
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. Nowadays, people tend to live in ever smaller family units. If each family were to spend large amounts of time growing and processing
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,
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 would be a poor use of society’s human resources. Another reason
convenience
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 foods are likely to become more popular is the increase in the number of adults, especially women with children, who work in full-time employment. In the UK,
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, working mothers significantly outnumber stay-at-home mothers. There is evidence that consumption of
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 foods rises with the amount of hours worked. As modern life increasingly demands that people are economically active,
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 trend is likely to continue.
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 many people still value traditional foods and methods of cooking, the trend towards smaller, dual-income households suggests that
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 foods are likely to continue to grow in popularity and may very well eventually replace traditional methods of
food
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 production and preparation.
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