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THE BELOW PICTURE SHOWS THE RECYCLING PROCESS OF WASTED GLASS BOTTLES

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The provided picture illustrates the way in which wasted
glass
bottles
 are recycled.
Overall
, three primary stages are shown on the diagram, beginning with the used
bottles
 gathered and ending with the packing and delivery to the supermarket for consumption. At the beginning of the process, the used
glass
bottles
 stem from supermarkets, which are mostly placed at the collection point by users, and
then
 these
bottles
 are transported to a specific place where they will be recycled. Turning to the next stage, after delivery, these wasted
bottles
 are cleaned by the high pressurised water.
Next,
the clean
bottles
 are divided into clear, brown, and green
glass
, which is
then
 broken into pieces in a
glass
 factory and burned in a furnace.
Then
, these pieces turn into liquid,
together with
 new
glass
 (liquid), ready for moulding into the
bottles
. Regarding the
last
 stage, the recycled
glass
bottles
 are filled and delivered to the supermarkets, where they are bought and used, and eventually run back into new
glass
bottles
 again.
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coherence cohesion
While the essay is clear and easy to follow, consider using more varied transitions to enhance the flow between different stages of the process.
task achievement
Pay attention to ensure there are no minor grammatical issues or slight inaccuracies that can detract from the overall quality.
task achievement
The essay provides a complete response to the task, covering all main stages of the glass bottle recycling process comprehensively.
coherence cohesion
Ideas are clearly and logically organized with a solid introduction and conclusion.
task achievement
The use of specific details, such as the types of glass and the cleaning method, helps to clearly convey the process.

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