Some people believe that to be successful at a sport you need a natural ability and others think that hard work and practice can make you successful. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

Although

many athletes are successful because of their natural ability, but not few people who were born with disabilities are successful too. Personally, not only in sports, but any other fields, talent is just the 20% of our success, while hard work and many practices are the 80%. With that being said, I disagree with the consensus of natural ability is the key to success for athletes. The reason why I think hard work and practice can

also

make you successful is because many have proved to the world.

For instance

, Nick Vuijeick, a person who was born without hands and legs, is able to do everything without anyone's help -- swimming, playing soccer, taking shower, etc. Of course, it takes lots of tears and sweats to be like him now. He once had a feeling of hopeless with himself until he decided to just give his life another chance. He started to practice how to eat with his thighs, put on his shirt from his head, etc.

This

proves that people who were born with disabilities can

also

be successful without having natural talent. Another reason why is that most people who think by having the talent without any practice tend to be lazy and ignore everything.

In other words

, they think they do not need any extra essentials to make them even more successful. Meanwhile, in reality, many athletes who pour their effort by giving their best and stretching themselves to the limits tend to be more successful. To illustrate, Damian Liliard, an NBA player, never thought to be

this

successful just by being a basketball player. What makes him becoming

this

famous and pro is his hard work and many practices every night; even after he encountered a hurtful event back

then

Moreover

, there are no family members who play basketball.

This

concludes that having natural ability can make you successful, but adding effort can make you even more. To conclude, no matter how good the athletes are, but none of them could be compared with them who give their time and effort to be a better athlete.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Some people believe that to be successful at a sport you need a natural ability and others think that hard work and practice can make you successful. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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