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Advertising has become an unavoidable part of everyone's life. Some people say that advertising is a positive part of our daily lives while others say it is negative one. Discuss both views and include your opinion.

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The promotion of different products is becoming common day by day. There are different viewpoints in people regarding advertisements. Some have positive views while others have negative. I personally think that the publicity of different types of products has negatively affected our society. According to a few people, the promotion of different products has positive effects.
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 is due to the following reasons.
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, flyers from different stores tell you about the products available on offer. You can easily decide where to buy a particular item.
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 to that, we can have information about any new products on the market.
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, with
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 publicity, the public becomes aware of any special offer and the latest things in the city. Contrary to that, advertising companies have
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 negatively affected our society.
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 they inform you about the latest items, they are actually leaving an impression on our subconscious. Those who even don't need a particular item buy it because of the attractive promoting way of the companies.
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 a lot of people end up wasting their money.
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, women are easily trapped in
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 way and unnecessarily buy plenty of branded clothes just because a particular model was wearing that dress.
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 all would lead us towards a community who can spend a lot on their own but cannot support the poor people. Concluding the essay I would say that different types of publicity stunts have a negative impact on the community. If
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 continues to happen in the future,
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 the poor will remain poor and rich people will become richer.
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