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Individuals should be allowed to carry guns. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In
this
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 day and age, the debate surrounding
gun
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 ownership remains a contentious issue globally.
This
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 essay agrees with the statement because having
firearm
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a firearm
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 will contribute to the
increase
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 of crime in society and affect
people
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's mental health.
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 with, the prevalence of
guns
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 in the community means incidents like robbery and other
crimes
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 are more likely to carry the risk of
gun
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violence
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. When
guns
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 are easily accessible, there is a higher likelihood of impulsive acts of
violence
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 and
crimes
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 of passion. To understand how the mass ownership of
guns
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 can
increase
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 the
violence
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 in a
country
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 we can compare a
country
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 like the USA, where carrying a
gun
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 is allowed, with a
country
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 like Japan, where it is restricted. In 2018, when the United States experienced over 24,000
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-related homicides, Japan had only 21 and
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 is quite an alarming comparison that reveals how firearms ownership by mass
people
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 can
increase
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violence
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 in a
country
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.
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, owning a
gun
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 can psychologically affect our behaviors and
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people
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 often commit
crimes
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 only because they have
guns
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 with them.
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, letting the public carry
guns
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 puts others' lives at risk rather than ensuring safety for all. Research indicates that accidental, psychological, and family
violence
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 gunshot wounds and deaths are quite high in countries where
people
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 can carry
guns
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 with them, and the only way to reduce
such
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 crime rates is not allowing
people
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 to own and carry
guns
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 on their wish. In conclusion, allowing citizens to carry
guns
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 does
increase
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crimes
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 and
violence
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 and leads to negative impacts on their mental health.
As a result
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, there is no doubt that
people
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 in a
country
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 should not be allowed to carry firearms.

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Your opinion

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