In some countries people who visit art galleries are reducing what are the reason for this. How can this problem be solved.

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have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)

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down all

in the number of people who visit

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galleries due to the

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industrial

revolution modern

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revolution in modern

era which has changed everything as according to

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the passage

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there are many reasons behind reducing

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trend and it

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problem

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there are numerous number of reasons why people are following

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trend. The primary factor is the busy lifestyle.

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today individuals are engaged too much in

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the hustle

and bustle of life they do not have

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objective case of they

them

go to out especially visiting in

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museums

the museum

because they live

sedentary lifestyle

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a sedentary lifestyle

sedentary lifestyles

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, the research has revealed that in many

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countries, approximately

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make

their life Like a rat race. Every lock has a key, if

some

closely similar or comparable in kind or quality or quantity or degree

same

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state of uncertainty or perplexity especially as requiring a choice between equally unfavorable options

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which is created in

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society, many

solutions are available to solve the problem.

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and foremost is that it is duty of

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higher

high

authority to aware the public about the importance of

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art gallery

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art galleries

the art gallery

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, they should

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organise

some camp in schools to increase the children's

intereste

a sense of concern with and curiosity about someone or something

interest

interests

towards the

art

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museum.

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government

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the government

should spend money to bring

changes

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change

into the

art

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buildings like infrastructure, represent the modern exhibition as well as provide free entries to people. In conclusion, everyone has realised

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the

worth of

art

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museum

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it helps to represent the cultural work and the talent of

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the person

a person

people

. If more and more people visit

art

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galleries

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