Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other type of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

A certain category of people believes that economic prosperity should be the aim of governments. Another set of people believe that other factors should be looked at when considering the development of a nation.
This
essay will discuss both sides of the argument and I will
also
state my views.
Firstly
, country's development is measured by how large her gross domestic product is.
This
is because the world has set it as a standard means of measurement.
For example
, Israel is considered to be more economically developed than Nigeria not because of size or power but their economy.
As a result
of
this
, all nations will focus more on what can boost their revenue and make it a priority.
On the other hand
, other factors like advancement in technology, health and even infrastructure should be given a priority by any country.
This
is because without
this
, a country would not be considered as a developed state.
For example
, despite high revenue that South Africa has, is still not recognized as an advanced territory because other three sectors mentioned above were not developed. Health is another important sector that should be developed because
this
will determine the life expectancy of its citizens. Diseased people in Nigeria including medical doctors are patronizing hospitals in the United States for treatment and work.
This
has resulted in a brain drain in Nigeria and significant improvement in the United States economy. In conclusion, I would argue that rather than concentrating efforts on economic status only, authorities must
also
consider greatly other factors that can contribute
greatness
Suggestion
greatly
to a state.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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