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Some say that rich countries should help poor countries with food and education. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your experience.

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Some people claim that developed nations should support undeveloped ones in terms of food and
education
. I mostly agree with
this
 statement because
these
denotes a person or thing
this
 helps are not costly for the developed countries, but beneficial to establish a more secure and happy world.
Firstly
, because most developed countries have great agricultural production and long experience
on
Suggestion
of
education
, helping poor countries in those areas will not be be difficult for them. They can provide
agircultural
relating to or used in or promoting agriculture or farming
agricultural
 machines and engineers to improve agriculture; teachers and scientist can can help educational development of these poor countries. There are a lot of educated people who willing to work in the undeveloped areas of the world. Governments can encourage these people as well. Scholarships to young people.
Thus
, it is easily solved
education
 and
poverity
the state of having little or no money and few or no material possessions
poverty
 problems of
undeveleoped
not developed
undeveloped
 nations by rich countries. When poor nations raised more educated and skilled manpower, they can establish democracy and the World will be safer. Those countries would become more stable and their citizens do not want to
emmigrate
leave one's country of residence for a new one
emigrate
immigrate
migrate
,
besides they
Accept comma addition
besides, they
 do not support illegal organisations
such
 as some criminal and terror groups.
In addition
 to social issues, most transmissible
dieases
an impairment of health or a condition of abnormal functioning
diseases
 from the poor nations would decline. Happiness and satisfaction level of their life will be better when they are not hungry and get enough
education
.
Hence
, it is clear at that time we will live in a better World. To conclude, I believe that helping poor nations are very beneficial for us and it is easy for rich nations, so that nations will be more contented in a safer environment.

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