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Some people think that children should obey rules or do what their parents and teachers want them to do. Other people think that children controlled too much cannot deal with problems themselves in adulthood. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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No matter at school or at home, children should obey some rules.
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 strict disciplines are sometimes important, I feel
this
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 may interfere the problem-solving abilities
for
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of
 children. The main purpose of discipline for children is to be responsible for their actions
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 it could help them to cultivate
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviours
behaviour
 when they are young. Unlike adults, children do not know the results of their
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
,
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 they will start to realize what to do in society to get recognition.
For example
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, they learn how to greet others, ask for help politely and pay attention to their manner while eating. Sometimes, disciplines may not bring good influence to children if those strict rules are enforced by parents who make them. If children depend too much on rules, they will not be able to solve problems independently. Parents rule out children about what
to do
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do
doing
 every day, when children grow up, they will not be able to plan their time independently and will not know how to tackle the requirements
in
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at
 work. It will be very hard for them to obtain success in their career life. Obeying rules may constrain
children’s imagination
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the children’s imagination
 that they will not be able to solve problems by using various measures. They do not dare to put their ideas into practice because they are afraid of the punishments by not following the rules. If students are restricted to a certain way of writing an assignment, they will not know the results of using other measures. The problems we come across during work
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 very complicated, and they will leave people without creativity helpless.
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