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Some people think that increasing the number of police officers on the street is the only effective way to reduce crime. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is indubitable that crime rates have been rising in recent decades, that it had reached a critical situation which needs to be dealt with. Some people suggest that the more police officers are out on patrols the less felonies are committed.
However
, I believe that an increase in patrols is not the optimum choice, but more rehabilitation centres.
First
 of all, increasing units is not a practical solution to the problem. Contrary to the general belief, the more agents that are out there the more crime rates will grow. In the USA,
for instance
, it has been shown that an increase in officers will result in a growth in racism as well as misconduct.
In addition
, a lot of cash is needed in order for
this
 solution to work.
Furthermore
, citizens will be taxed more, due to the government's inability to fund
such
 task. Increasing officers have proven to be an ineffective way to deal with crime, whereas, solutions that include human development is more efficient.
Secondly
, rehabilitation centres and other programs which integrate previous convicts back into the society are far better. To put it in another way, self developing programs like teaching convicts interpersonal skills, or other vocational skills, proved to be better for both community and criminals.
For example
, in Britain, inmates are taught how to cook gourmet food in a program lead by Gordon Ramsay.
Therefore
, by the time they are out, they will have a qualification to work at top restaurants and learn their mistakes. To conclude, I believe that enlarging the number of agents will not be practical and may have a detrimental effect, whereas trying to develop prisoners' skills while they serve their sentence is more effective.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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