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There has been an increase in the number of homeless people all around the world. What are the causes of it?

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Of late, Homelessness has been a prevailing concern in the significant part of the universe. A sea change has been witnessed an increasing number of homeless people searching for a place to live in the past.
However
, there are so many people all around the earth that are deprived of a beautiful comfortable family. The following paragraph's would elucidate possible reasons for the problem and propose a handful remedial measure. To commence with the reasons.
First
 and foremost, many people across the world have left their homes in search of jobs in different parts of the country or the cosmos.
Hence
, while it is easy to leave the house, it is not very easy to get a job, leaving people homeless and jobless.
For instance
, There are even some children who shed away their responsibility of parents and send them to home shelters. These people are not only deprived of the love and care they deserve when they get old, but
also
 of the home they have built in their lives. Undoubtedly, every lock has a key, some solutions should be implemented.
First
 of all, there has been an increase in the crime rate all over the world.
As a result
, with the number of children being kidnapped all over the world, they are being forced into beggary or prostitution, taking away their home and beautiful life.
In addition
, with wars happening around the globe, there are so many people who lose their accommodation and have to live in the refugee camps before any country accepts them. Sometimes
this
 wait is only for some years while other times it extends to life time. Other factors
such
 as natural calamities
also
 play a role in taking away the homes. To recapitulate, surely there has been an increase in the number of people losing their accommodation. It not only causes them physical pain, but as well mental agony. In my opinion, the government should surely take initiatives to ensure that more and more people have stable homes to live in.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interdependence
  • globalization
  • technological advancements
  • collective action
  • digital evolution
  • minimal reliance
  • direct interaction
  • empowered
  • access to technology
  • societal expectations
  • personal choice
  • leverage
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