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Some people think that art is an essential subject for children at school while others think it is a waste of time. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Art
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 is
way
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a way
 for people to express their feelings and creativity to others. Some people consider
art
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 is
crucial
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a crucial subject
subject
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 for youngsters at
school
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 while opponents argue that it is a
timepass
a measuring instrument or device for keeping time
timepiece
.
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 essay will discuss both sides and I argue that it is
important
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an important subject
subject
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. On the one hand, it is true that some people that lecture
of
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on
about
art
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 and craft is necessary for children at
school
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 because
school
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 act as a stepping stone to accomplish the success in life. It plays a vital role in career prospective.
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, children learn their hidden potential through various activities which are held in
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such
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 as dancing
,
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,
 singing
,
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,
art
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 exhibitions etc. Most of the time they spend on
school
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 so there is need to motivate them to think about their talent. In
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 way students
also
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 think out of the books.
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, it is
also
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 best criteria for offsprings to express their emotions through paintings and other activities which makes them creative.
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,
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the alternative view
an alternative view
 is that others claim because of
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 adolescents feel frustrated because more burden of the study. They confront the problems like time management.
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, who are not good at
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 they
seems
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seem
 it difficult and feel disappointments. According to them it should be an optional
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 at
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,
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 so that only interested students will be
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participating
 in
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 work.
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,
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 in conclusion it can be said that
art
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 is imperative
subject
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 at
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rathar
on the contrary
rather
 than optional because if it is compulsory for students than they understand and will
do
engage in
make
 some efforts to learn about their talent.
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Then
 it may helpful for them.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-expression
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving
  • cultural awareness
  • tolerant society
  • STEM subjects
  • employability
  • rigorous subjects
  • curriculum
  • school budgets
  • enriches
  • complements
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