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People should read only those books that are about real events, real people and established facts. Do you agree or disagree with the statement?

#people #books #events #facts
It is argued that books containing true facts and actual people should be
read
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reading
. I disagree with
this
 statement, in my view people do study in the schools or in their education about the known facts and
trivial
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trivia
 about
people
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people, however
however
 fiction books open a portal of imagination for many people and is helpful as a stress buster. Fiction novels brings creativity in everyone who reads it. It is evident that reading a creative writing enhances imagination in a
person
.
Such
 books always have positive outcomes; it embraces hopes in people’s life.
In addition
, most of the books have been
source
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a source
the source
 of income for many artistic people in
last
 decades,
for
example in
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example, in
 the movie Harry potter art had a major role to play to incorporate reality.
In contrast
, reading the
autobiography often
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autobiography, often
 gives a disturbing outcome as it covers the in and out life of the
person
 who was once famous. These
novels mostly
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novels, mostly
 edit out the worst version,
thus
 it does not give correct facts about the
person
.
Secondly
, reading tales
often helps
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often help
 a
person
 to forget the problems and relieves their stress. It has surveyed that
people
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person
 who reads
imagination
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imaginative
 stories are far happier and hopeful in life than the one who reads the real facts, newspaper or autobiography. Children embraces stories about
santa
the legendary patron saint of children; an imaginary being who is thought to bring presents to children at Christmas
Santa
 Claus and the griffin, they learn the difference between good and bad through the channel of stories. Handing them realistic stories would make them dull and schools are already having years and dates of major wars, ruling kings, freedom stories inculcated in their curriculum. In conclusion, people need miracles, naked truth would make
world
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the world
 more stressful and dark. We humans need a stories to make new inventions.
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