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The chart and graph below give information about sales and share prices for Coca-Cola. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The chart and graph below give information about sales and share prices for Coca-Cola. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The graph illustrates information about the
share
price
 of Coca-Cola, between 1996 and 2001 and the chart shows data about the
sales
 of
the
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soft drink in five continents in the
year
 2000.
Overall
, In the
year
 2000, North America contributed to the highest number of Coca-Cola
sales
. Middle-East and Africa are the places where the
sales
 are minimum.
On the other hand
, there was an upward trend in the
share
price
 of
the
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soft drink during the initial period, followed by a decline and fluctuations in the end. In the
year
 2000, when
sales
 of Coca-Cola are minimum,
North-America
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North America
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 contributed to the highest percentage with 30.4% of global consumption. It was followed by Latin America and Europe with 25.7% and 20.5% respectively. Consumption of
the
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soft drink is quite better in Asia compared to Africa and
Middle-East
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Middle East
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 with 16.4%.
Finally
, with only 7% of global usage Africa and
Middle-East
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Middle East
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stands
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last
 in
the
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sales
. Regarding the
share
price
 of the company, it started
around
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at around
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 40$ in
the
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year
 1996,
after
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and after
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 that the
price
 increased rapidly till
mid 1997
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mid-1997
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, reaching a value of just under 70. At
this
 point, the
share
 declined significantly, reaching approximately 60$.
Following
this
, it
went-up
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went up
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 considerably to a value of around 80$ in 1998, which is the peak value of the
share
 in the given period.
Next
, the
share
price
 declined steadily to under 50$ by 2000.
Finally
, the
share
price
 fluctuated and reached 55$ by the end of the period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words share, price, sales, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuations
  • market share
  • geographic distribution
  • revenue
  • financial performance
  • quarterly reports
  • shareholder
  • economic indicators
  • consumer behavior
  • aggregate data
  • profit margins
  • fiscal period
  • trend analysis
  • variance
  • growth rate
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