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Nowadays many students have the opportunity to study for part or all of their courses in foreign countries. While studying abroad brings many benefits to individual students, it also has a number of disadvantages.

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These days, the chances to study aboard has increased and a large number of people pursue their studies from overseas.
Although
, cultural and linguistic barrier are considered to be an imperative
drawbacks
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drawback
, it aids in personal growth and bring us out from our comfort
zone which
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zone, which
otherwise
 cannot be possible if we study in our own
country
. The prime benefit of acquiring education
from international institution
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from an international institution
 is that it
build
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builds
 our personality and helps us to lead an independent life. Living alone without any support not only develops our confidence, but
also
 makes us self-sufficient.
For instance
, when I was in my
country
 all my expenses were dealt
by
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with
 my
parents but
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parents, but
 now I am capable enough to manage my finances and cope up with every circumstance that have been thrown in my path. The language and social difference are the biggest challenge faced by the international students. Sometimes it becomes so hard to communicate with others due to these petty issues.
For example
, I remember that during my
initially
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initial
 days, my understanding about local language is extremely poor and whenever, I have to buy grocery,
it
it is
it's
 become so awkward to ask the sales person regarding any query. Studying aboard
has becomes
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becomes
has become
is becoming
became
 immensely popular. In my opinion,
it
it is
it's
 not only exchange knowledge between students of different
countries but
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countries, but
also
 interchange their ideas, thoughts, norms, values and students are able to paint
positive image
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a positive image
 of their
country
 around the world. The advantage to opt higher education from
different
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a different country
different countries
country
 is way more than their disadvantages and cannot be overshadow.

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