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In some countries, people follow the latest fashion and hairstyles. In your opinion, what is influencing this? Is this a good or bad thing?

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Latest trends in terms of
fashion
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 and
hairstyles
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 have followers in some countries. In my opinion, there are multiple reasons promoting it, and unless checked it could lead to loss of diversification. In
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 day and age, one reason why people follow trendy
fashion
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 is because of the boom in the
fashion
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 industries. People today, in these industries, are more creative than they were ever before, and
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, many different
fashion
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 designs catering to various tastes of the people have emerged. Another reason why
fashion
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 attracts many followers from some countries is due to the aggressive advertisement on media. Reaching out to people and promoting
fashion
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 brands by means of handy mobile phones is a large means to secure customers. These are clear reasons why people opt for different
hairstyles
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 and
fashion
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 in today’s world.
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, people adopting ever-changing
fashion
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 and
hairstyles
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 is a bad thing.
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 is down to the fact that it leads to exploitation by businesses and corporations which aims at making
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a profit
profits
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 of purely delivering multiple ideas. Take,
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, the clothing brand who promote misleading adverts about the skinny denim jeans they manufacture. Jeans of
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 variety compresses own’s thighs, and disrupting the blood flow. In order to profit, business owners do not consider the impact their product will have on consumer’s health and often use cheap material to prepare them. In conclusion, undoubtedly people have more options today regarding
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 and
hairstyles
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 but an eye should be kept on the downsides that they could they.

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