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Many governments in the world spend large amounts of money on art, which helps to improve the quality of peoples lives. However, governments should spend money on other things rather than art. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.

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In recent years, Many Governments spend more
money
 for an
art
 to encourage their cultural heritage has to be grown more and more.
However
, with recent financial crisis and unemployment,
this
 lavishness should be questionable. People like taxpayers think that spending
money
 on useful things like employment, hospitality rather than on cultural endeavours. I fully agree with
this
 point and in
this
 essay will look at
this
 view in detail with suitable examples.
Firstly
, as my sight,
Art
 will attract only few percentage of people who understand Arts. Understanding will be quite difficult for normal people when compared to sports.
In addition
, Campaigns for
art
 galleries are less.
Thus
, least number of visits to
art
 galleries and
also
 purchasing things occur more cost so income from
art
 is quite less.
For instance
, recently football match and
art
 exhibition was held at the same time in London. The majority of people came and enjoyed the football match only rather than the
art
 exhibition.
Secondly
, The source of
money
 for an
art
 is coming mostly from tax payers only, so most of them will anticipate that the Government should take necessary steps to improve their lifestyle, employments and Industry developments, Security like many things than
art
.
Thus
, People will believe government and put their own efforts unconditionally to raise their country's reputation.
For instance
, a few decades ago, Singapore was one of the colonial country's, after they got independence, Mr. Lee The father of Singapore with his team had raised the government, focused on many developments than
art
 and improved his peoples' lifestyle. Singapore has now become one of the developed countries in the world. To conclude, the Government should focus many things for Human Resource Development whereas spending more
money
 on
art
.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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