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In order to study at university, students are required to pay expensive tuition fees. Not all students can afford them, so some people think that university education should be free for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Water
 scarcity is becoming a significant global problem with far-reaching effects. Long-term solutions require extensive government intervention in programmes, including research and climate mitigation measures, but individuals
also
 need to become aware of the need for
water
 conservation. A major problem for all countries is the huge amount of
water
 necessary for agriculture and industry. When there is insufficient
water
, crops fail, animals die and people go hungry. Without an adequate
water
 supply, manufacturers, food producers, mining operations and businesses cannot succeed. Ultimately,
water
 is the key to economic prosperity.
Water
 shortages create particular difficulties in developing countries.
Firstly
, many women and children in these countries have to spend the whole day walking to and from a remote
water
 source to fetch
water
.
Consequently
, these children miss school and often do not receive an adequate education.
Secondly
, the
water
that is
 available for daily use may be contaminated, and
this
 can lead to illness and even death. One of the most important long-term solutions to
this
 problem is to work towards reducing global warming and climate change, as dry regions are becoming drier across the planet.
Additionally
, pollution of waterways needs to be addressed, as we take steps to clean up our existing supplies of
this
 precious resource. Many old-fashioned irrigation schemes are generally very wasteful, so funds need to be available for research into
water
 conservation and new irrigation technologies. These technologies could
then
 be transferred to developing nations. At an individual level, we need to become aware of wasteful
water
-use habits,
such
 as watering lawns in the summer, or pouring our grey
water
 down the drain. In conclusion, the inadequate supply of fresh
water
 is one of the most crucial environmental problems facing our planet, and we need to work to preserve
this
 precious resource.
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