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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs (for example, working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The matter of volunteering programmes as a compulsory part of school education has been discussed for years. Still, there are some who disagree with
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 idea and a plethora of proponents as well. Personally, I strongly agree that these kinds of
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 can help youngsters foster self-awareness and self-responsibility and
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 local projects. It goes without saying that, in accordance with the well-known saying "Old habits die hard", we should start in childhood and teach young people to pay attention to what happens around them.
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 by giving them a real chance to access not only workshops, but
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 local
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 in which they can be involved. In
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 way, they can
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 themselves with everything they should know about collaboration, communication, time management and conflict resolution. Library volunteers, who usually help to organise books,
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 meetings or even conduct workshops, will soon become well-equipped workers.
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,
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 kind of involvement helps local communities and
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 deal with recurrent problems related to insufficient human resources ready to
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 them when needed. I have heard many stories about non-governmental organisations that are looking for volunteers when they organise festivals or cultural events, and there is always a shortage of people to help them. In conclusion, I do believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes, not only to
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 and address shortages of human resources, but
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 because it helps youngsters become better prepared for the labour market.

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task response
Keep a clear view from start to end. In the middle, add one simple view that may not agree and say why your view still wins.
coherence
Use small linking words like also, but, so, and then to show how ideas go together.
lexis
Use short, common words. Avoid long or hard phrases that are not in plain talk.
grammar
Check behave grammar and small spelling mistakes. Fix subject-verb errors.
examples
Give a few real, easy examples or facts to back up your points.
content
Clear view on the topic.
structure
Good flow from start to end.
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Examples connect to the idea well.
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Links to local work are used well.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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