Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree of disagree with this opinion?

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A group of individuals

believe

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believes

that

music

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plays

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indispensable role to boost listener's connection from different aspects

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as ages, nationalities and others. Personally, I totally agree with

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statement by a variety of explanations related to language and culture which people should accumulate There is no doubt that

music

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might contribute to eliminate the barrier of language in other countries. In fact, there are a number of bands from Asia

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as Girl Generation, Twice, BTS and other countless that gain a widespread reputation in both hometown and Western even though some of their fans do not understand the

meaningful

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meaningfulness

of the song listening. Due to people's hobby at their preferred type of

music

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, they willingly adopt and understand the melody of

song

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the song

songs

without any irritation.

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music

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might create a chance for people to bond together regardless of distinction on language

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, the traditional cultures of each

celebrities

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celebrity

might be presented

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with

songs they have adopted.

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, "Love story" of Taylor Swift which was

retelled

the selling of goods to consumers; usually in small quantities and not for resale

retailed

retooled

the love of a couple come from two different families helps people understand more about the life of

Westerner

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the Westerner

Westerners

a Westerner

and the social conflict in thousand-back years.

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, people

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have been known about Vietnamese culture by the song "Hello Vietnam".

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shared audiences with many pictures about local woman and children in daily

rountine

an unvarying or habitual method or procedure

routine

routines

and showed up a traditional clothing "long dress".

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, when people around the world deeply accumulate the habit of each

countries

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country

, they would intimate more intensive together. In conclusion,

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consider that

music

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not only helps people to relax after a hard-working day, but

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generate an opportunity to

exchage

chemical process in which one atom or ion or group changes places with another

exchange

information each

cultures

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culture

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, people would reduce their distance from geography and location to live and develop together in the eye-catching society

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

299 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

universal language
evoke
connect
diverse audiences
cultural exchange
generational gaps
shared experiences
unifying force

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