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Some people believes that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

#people #choices
In
this
 day and age, globalization presents people with an overwhelming number of options. Due to innovative technologies, numerous choices are now available to people in terms of communication and agriculture.
First
 of all, in the past, people can only use the letter writing to communicate with each other,
this
 can cause lost in connection between them.
For instance
, if people travel to long distance journey, their family members will not hear about him until he writes them a letter. Today, in the modern era, individuals can opt varieties of options for communication through not only the hand phone, but
also
 online and social media like Facebook, snap chat and Skype.
Therefore
, they can always keep in touch with their family and friends around the globe without losing contact. Turning to the agriculture, people has become choice advance agricultural technologies for their farms and crops. In the
last
 years, they only use manual for farming practices
such
 as plough and harrow,
that is
 time consuming and more cost. Today, farmers are using advanced mechanization
such
 as tractors, planters and combines, it has enabled them to produce more and less labour cost and time saving.
Furthermore
, people have become selected genetically modified varieties and organic foods which grow quicker, bigger and more delicious and healthy than the older ones. In summary, there is no doubt that people have a plethora of choices in today's world and it really fulfils their needs and effectively by replacing the boring stuffs to the better ones.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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